Tutorial 2 – Academic Skills
1. The differences between grey entrepreneurs and their younger counterparts – In
what ways do the two cohorts differ from each other?
Improved: What are the main differences in entrepreneurial motivations, challenges,
and business performance between grey entrepreneurs and younger entrepreneurs in
the Netherlands?
Why better? This version specifies the context (Netherlands), identifies concrete
dimensions (motivations, challenges, performance), and avoids vague wording (“in what
ways”), making the research measurable and thesis-ready.
2. To which extent is the offering of real-time ridesharing accepted by generation Y
in Germany?
Improved: To what extent do Generation Y consumers in Germany accept real-time
ridesharing services, and which factors (e.g., convenience, cost, sustainability) shape
their acceptance?
Why better? It introduces relevant factors, uses academic wording (“to what extent”),
and defines the group of interest more clearly, which helps in designing a survey or
quantitative study.
3. What is the relationship between the financial performance of German pension
funds and Socially Responsible Investment (SRI) activities?
Improved: How does the degree of Socially Responsible Investment (SRI) activity
influence the financial performance of German pension funds?
Why better? It indicates directionality (SRI → performance), making it suitable for
hypothesis testing in a thesis. The wording also aligns with typical causal analysis in
finance and management research.
4. Will the supply chain trend of zero-packaging grocery stores in Germany revitalize
the integration of rural, local suppliers?
Improved: To what extent do zero-packaging grocery stores in Germany contribute to the
reintegration of rural, local suppliers into supply chains?
Why better? Avoids predictive wording (“will”), focuses on measurable contribution,
and fits into an exploratory or explanatory research design.
1. The differences between grey entrepreneurs and their younger counterparts – In
what ways do the two cohorts differ from each other?
Improved: What are the main differences in entrepreneurial motivations, challenges,
and business performance between grey entrepreneurs and younger entrepreneurs in
the Netherlands?
Why better? This version specifies the context (Netherlands), identifies concrete
dimensions (motivations, challenges, performance), and avoids vague wording (“in what
ways”), making the research measurable and thesis-ready.
2. To which extent is the offering of real-time ridesharing accepted by generation Y
in Germany?
Improved: To what extent do Generation Y consumers in Germany accept real-time
ridesharing services, and which factors (e.g., convenience, cost, sustainability) shape
their acceptance?
Why better? It introduces relevant factors, uses academic wording (“to what extent”),
and defines the group of interest more clearly, which helps in designing a survey or
quantitative study.
3. What is the relationship between the financial performance of German pension
funds and Socially Responsible Investment (SRI) activities?
Improved: How does the degree of Socially Responsible Investment (SRI) activity
influence the financial performance of German pension funds?
Why better? It indicates directionality (SRI → performance), making it suitable for
hypothesis testing in a thesis. The wording also aligns with typical causal analysis in
finance and management research.
4. Will the supply chain trend of zero-packaging grocery stores in Germany revitalize
the integration of rural, local suppliers?
Improved: To what extent do zero-packaging grocery stores in Germany contribute to the
reintegration of rural, local suppliers into supply chains?
Why better? Avoids predictive wording (“will”), focuses on measurable contribution,
and fits into an exploratory or explanatory research design.
