05.07 Exploring the Satirical Prompt Williams Field High School ENGLISH EN407W/EN4

Respond​ ​to​ ​the​ ​following​ ​questions​ ​after​ ​you​ ​have​ ​read​ ​the​ ​student​ ​responses​ ​and
the​ ​scoring​ ​commentary:

1. What​ ​elements​ ​of​ ​satire​ ​did​ ​you​ ​notice​ ​the​ ​first​ ​time​ ​you​ ​read​ ​the​ ​article?
a. The​ ​article​ ​exaggerates​ ​the​ ​product​ ​immensely.​ ​The​ ​product​ ​is​ ​built​ ​up
to​ ​be​ ​this​ ​item​ ​made​ ​from​ ​the​ ​finest​ ​material​ ​that​ ​has​ ​the​ ​best​ ​impact
on​ ​your​ ​feet,​ ​almost​ ​like​ ​it​ ​was​ ​made​ ​from​ ​Heaven.​ ​Not​ ​to​ ​mention​ ​the
satirical​ ​tone​ ​carried​ ​through​ ​the​ ​entire​ ​article.​ ​It​ ​is​ ​obvious​ ​that​ ​the
article​ ​is​ ​mocking​ ​the​ ​product.
2. What​ ​rhetorical​ ​strategies​ ​contribute​ ​to​ ​the​ ​satire?​ ​How​ ​are​ ​they​ ​effectively
used?
a. The​ ​use​ ​of​ ​hyperboles​ ​in​ ​the​ ​article​ ​help​ ​to​ ​contribute​ ​to​ ​this,​ ​alluding​ ​to
the​ ​over-exaggeration​ ​that​ ​comes​ ​in​ ​all​ ​advertisements.​ ​Irony​ ​occurs
because​ ​the​ ​article​ ​is​ ​about​ ​an​ ​advertisement​ ​mocking​ ​advertisements,
only​ ​adding​ ​to​ ​the​ ​tone.​ ​Both​ ​of​ ​these​ ​strategies​ ​are​ ​used​ ​to​ ​contribute
to​ ​the​ ​satirical​ ​tone,​ ​which​ ​is​ ​very​ ​effective.​ ​By​ ​adding​ ​irony​ ​on​ ​top​ ​of​ ​all
the​ ​various​ ​hyperboles,​ ​it​ ​is​ ​crystal​ ​clear​ ​that​ ​the​ ​entire​ ​article​ ​is​ ​a​ ​well
executed​ ​satire.
3. What​ ​are​ ​the​ ​key​ ​differences​ ​between​ ​student​ ​response​ ​2A​ ​and​ ​student
response​ ​2B?​ ​How​ ​do​ ​you​ ​account​ ​for​ ​the​ ​three-point​ ​difference​ ​in​ ​scores?
a. I​ ​think​ ​that​ ​the​ ​main​ ​differences​ ​would​ ​be​ ​the​ ​use​ ​of​ ​quotes​ ​and
explanation.​ ​Student​ ​2A​ ​uses​ ​various​ ​quotes​ ​to​ ​support​ ​their​ ​claims,
while​ ​student​ ​2B​ ​does​ ​not.​ ​2A​ ​makes​ ​a​ ​point​ ​of​ ​pulling​ ​evidence​ ​from
the​ ​article​ ​to​ ​prove​ ​the​ ​validity​ ​of​ ​their​ ​claim.​ ​2B​ ​does​ ​use​ ​a​ ​quote​ ​here
and​ ​there,​ ​but​ ​not​ ​nearly​ ​as​ ​often​ ​as​ ​2A,​ ​which​ ​could​ ​contribute​ ​to​ ​the
point​ ​difference.​ ​Another​ ​major​ ​difference​ ​would​ ​be​ ​the​ ​explanation​ ​of
each​ ​strategy/​ ​device​ ​used.​ ​Student​ ​2A​ ​thoroughly​ ​explains​ ​the
reasons​ ​for​ ​their​ ​conclusion​ ​as​ ​well​ ​as​ ​supports​ ​it.​ ​2B​ ​does​ ​not​ ​explain
their​ ​reasons​ ​as​ ​thoroughly,​ ​which​ ​doesn’t​ ​develop​ ​the​ ​essay​ ​as​ ​well.
4. Explain​ ​the​ ​score​ ​received​ ​by​ ​the​ ​writer​ ​of​ ​student​ ​response​ ​2C.​ ​Where​ ​do
you​ ​think​ ​this​ ​writer​ ​might​ ​have​ ​missed​ ​an​ ​opportunity​ ​to​ ​craft​ ​a​ ​much
stronger​ ​essay?​ ​Where​ ​are​ ​the​ ​opportunities​ ​for​ ​improvement?
a. Student​ ​2C​ ​did​ ​not​ ​analyze​ ​the​ ​strategies.​ ​In​ ​my​ ​opinion,​ ​they​ ​identified
the​ ​strategies,​ ​but​ ​did​ ​not​ ​add​ ​any​ ​other​ ​information.​ ​There​ ​was​ ​little​ ​to
no​ ​explanation​ ​about​ ​the​ ​effectiveness​ ​of​ ​the​ ​strategies,​ ​a​ ​major
downfall.​ ​The​ ​diction​ ​that​ ​was​ ​used​ ​was​ ​not​ ​professional​ ​or​ ​correct​ ​for
the​ ​essay.​ ​The​ ​essay​ ​was​ ​very​ ​under-developed​ ​and​ ​did​ ​not​ ​make​ ​a
clear​ ​point.​ ​I​ ​think​ ​that​ ​the​ ​big​ ​issue​ ​was​ ​the​ ​lack​ ​of​ ​analysis​ ​of​ ​the